Feedback on final cut

good
good use of editing techniques - blurred vision
Good use of effects on shots
Good description of character on introduction
Good use of sound
Different ways of showing lost identity
Good use of camera angles
Very nice camera shots/angles
Good convention of identity with information of character lose of memory also with hand held shots and canted angles
Use of music added with effects
Video effects set the scene well
Good titles "word things" were good
Good editing
Good use of camera angles
Good video effects
Conventions of identity
The credits were original and how they mixed with the words was good
Good blurred shots
Really liked the use of definitions leading up to the title
Thought the sound went well with the narrative and added to the atmosphere
Good use of props as the audience asks questions
Sound track created suspense and unease
Ticking clock very effective as creates suspense
Disorientated effect was very effective
bad
Could improve on soundtrack to get a feel of disorientation
Strange cut in the middle
Don't really understand it
Abrupt change wasn't very good
Maybe fade out before the end
Main title was a little unclear
Titles could be clearer
Ending is odd
Credits not very dynamic
Include more varied shots
More camera work could have been used

Oblitus Final

Editing:
With our feedback we found that the titles lasted for too long and we should have included music to help add to the genre. The continuity is slightly off because the shots move around too much and the editing pace is slow, so not much is happening. We need more transitions.

Sound:
We have a good use of diegetic sound effects and the silence is said to have been effective. A sound track could be used to carry on a narrative. Because of the lack of a sound track, some laughing is heard in the background which in future will be cut out.

Camera Work:
Our use of a point of use shot is good and we have a good range of shot types i.e. close up.

Mise En Scene:
The costume our main character uses is seen as appropriate. The lighting on the bedside table is a little too dark making the footage slightly unclear. One group felt we needed to expand our use of location though we feel this is inappropriate as this is where the scene is set, though once the credits have been put into out final cut, we will make sure it is more obvious why this location is important.

Titles:
To another group the title was unclear, this may be because it is a latin word which they are not familiar with, though we will make sure the title becomes more clear. We haven't any credits yet though will add them in in time fore the final cut.

Thriller Conventions:
The zoom into the eyes is seen as a good thriller convention, though no crime is present and no weakness is shown though we will make his weakness (amnesia) apparent in the credits. No suspense has been built up so perhaps we will be able to do this before the alarm goes off. One group was confused as to why no identity was shown though this is because it is a conventional thriller based around lost identity.

editing action plan

Our group has until next wednesday to finish our final cut so this is what we need to add to our thriller before then:

• Our opening credits still need to be added 
• Music needs to be added 
• Edit out laughing 
• Remove picture of zebra crossing

Oblitus - Rough cut

Sonic mood board

This is our sonic mood board. We feel it represents what we hope our final film will be like very well, as we have included some of the key motifs such as a clock, and someone laying on their side with their eyes open.